I've read Divine Lineage at www.fanfiction.net., and I'm glad to see it here. I like the direction the story is taking. Sometimes it helps not having the game's entire dialogue be paraphrased; I usually find originality to have more substance.
As far as your English goes, let?s just say that some native speakers are worst off than you are. If you need help with proofreading, I'm sure some fellow gamers wouldn't mind giving you a hand. Me, I'm no Shakespeare... but I do know what I like.
I got to see the Star Wars movies when I was a wee one, but never really got hooked. I find most games based on blockbusters to be disappointing, to say the least. However, after reading a few threads on this forum it got me curious.