*nods*. I noticed after I went back and re-read the eariler chapters. I think I forgot to tie up certain plots. Very bad of me. I'm going to write one more chapter and possibly amend the last chapter to sum up everything. Thank you for pointing that out.
Comments on "Enielle's Disappearance"
Started by farsal, Apr 30 2004 08:55 AM
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Posted 15 March 2005 - 02:14 AM
No problem. Will look forward to the additions.
Still modding the Mod for the Wicked... It is a big project you know... And I got sidetracked (several times) a bit... sorry.
However, as we all know, Evil never really sleeps.
Sentences marking (my) life:
Winds of change... Endure them, and in Enduring grow Stronger
It takes a fool to look for logic in a man's heart
Never question the sanity of the insane
The Harmony of Life is Chaos
Living on Wings of Dreams
(1st march 2009) SHS women over me:
Kat: if there were more guys that looked like you out here, people's offspring wouldnt be so damn ugly
Noctalys: you are adorable 
~~ I love it, and I am humbled! Yay! ~~
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Posted 17 March 2005 - 08:16 PM
Thanks Deathsangel.
I posted a new chapter in between chapters 9 and 11. Sorry for the confusion. Hopefully the ending makes more sense now. =P
I posted a new chapter in between chapters 9 and 11. Sorry for the confusion. Hopefully the ending makes more sense now. =P
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Posted 18 March 2005 - 12:24 AM
The loose strings are attached! Imoen & Kelsey excape. The parallel self is gone and a valuable hint to clear-up the story :thumb:
One grammar mistake I believe:
Imoen swung the sorceror's hand over her shoulder - this should be sorcerer's
One grammar mistake I believe:
Imoen swung the sorceror's hand over her shoulder - this should be sorcerer's
Edited by Deathsangel, 18 March 2005 - 12:25 AM.
Still modding the Mod for the Wicked... It is a big project you know... And I got sidetracked (several times) a bit... sorry.
However, as we all know, Evil never really sleeps.
Sentences marking (my) life:
Winds of change... Endure them, and in Enduring grow Stronger
It takes a fool to look for logic in a man's heart
Never question the sanity of the insane
The Harmony of Life is Chaos
Living on Wings of Dreams
(1st march 2009) SHS women over me:
Kat: if there were more guys that looked like you out here, people's offspring wouldnt be so damn ugly
Noctalys: you are adorable
~~ I love it, and I am humbled! Yay! ~~
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Posted 18 March 2005 - 12:48 AM
Thank you Deathsangel. I considered my job done after correcting the spelling. hehe. 'Sorcerer' is one of those words I can't seem to get it right; and 'Sorceress' just made it worse. hehe.
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Posted 27 March 2005 - 07:03 PM
Oh, I'm so glad I only began to read as it was nearing the end 
Couldn't have stood the pressure of waiting for the end
Very good story. Liked it from the beginning to the end. I like Anomen's character both in his chivalrous overpiousness and raging outbursts. I believe it makes him look more real; not just perfect and with a story behind him. I really liked how you made him alive, turning evil in a very plausible way. I think it was a "good read" of his character - as far as I, not his author, can say.
Read other stories from you too...
Btw, I just read the two ones that are in the Finished stories thread... I almost didn't read your story since it wasn't in there... just opened it, skipped to the end and noticed that there was "the end" at the bottom of the thread. So I though, yeah, I won't have to wait for ages for an end that might never come... so I read it. But maybe it would be a good idea to have it added to the Finished stories thread, just so that people like me can know.
I rather liked the style. I didn't find it too complicated (well, one might easily argue that I write that way too), unless in some places that others have already said awkward. But I believe that the first paragraph was right that way. I don't know exactly how to explain it, but the words made it more complicated to go through the sentences, and it made me feel like Enielle fighting to resurface.
So. My opinion: :thumb:
Couldn't have stood the pressure of waiting for the end Very good story. Liked it from the beginning to the end. I like Anomen's character both in his chivalrous overpiousness and raging outbursts. I believe it makes him look more real; not just perfect and with a story behind him. I really liked how you made him alive, turning evil in a very plausible way. I think it was a "good read" of his character - as far as I, not his author, can say.
Read other stories from you too...
Btw, I just read the two ones that are in the Finished stories thread... I almost didn't read your story since it wasn't in there... just opened it, skipped to the end and noticed that there was "the end" at the bottom of the thread. So I though, yeah, I won't have to wait for ages for an end that might never come... so I read it. But maybe it would be a good idea to have it added to the Finished stories thread, just so that people like me can know.
I rather liked the style. I didn't find it too complicated (well, one might easily argue that I write that way too), unless in some places that others have already said awkward. But I believe that the first paragraph was right that way. I don't know exactly how to explain it, but the words made it more complicated to go through the sentences, and it made me feel like Enielle fighting to resurface.
So. My opinion: :thumb:
"I set on this journey trying to understand why has metal been stereotyped, dismissed, and condemned. My answer is this: if, listening to that music, you don't get that overwhelming rush of power that makes the hair stand at the back of your neck, you may never will. But you know what, it doesn't really matter. Because, judging from the 40 000 people around me, we're doing just fine without ya." 
Cheers! And two horns up for metalheads all around the world!
Cheers! And two horns up for metalheads all around the world!
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Posted 27 March 2005 - 08:04 PM
Thank you, DalreïDal. I forgot about the finished thread part, I'll PM a moderator to add it in. thanks.
I think this story is the most detailed story I wrote about any character, in particular, Anomen. Thank you for reading and commenting.
I think this story is the most detailed story I wrote about any character, in particular, Anomen. Thank you for reading and commenting.
