Because there's something about "Angst and the Analyst" that I've been looking for in "Mind Games," and to be quite honest, I can't find it.
It's, er, a different story? Maybe you were expecting a continuation of certain formulaic methodologies.
I've been told that Riona is yet another username slip-in. But for someone who doesn't know that, "Angst" is a great story. It's light, it's funny, and draws characters and events together in such a way that makes you think. Some of that same spirit is in "Mind Games." I think it's hiding behind another spirit, a "how much cuteness can we pile on the reader?" spirit.
Why should that character's name make a difference? I fail to see your point. Anyway, this is the Mind Games thread, not the Angst and Analyst comment thread.
You bring up a good point. I've always thought that 'cuteness' is in the eye of the beholder -- er, no pun intended. In this case, the reader. I, for one, don't see anything 'cute' at all about this story.
The idea of Morningglory learning knife-throwing from Aran Linvail is neat. The characters still have their distinctive charm. I don't think the plot is as tongue-in-cheek as the characters, and the story suffers as a result. You could play down the "doom befalls the world" plot, or play it up to make it fit the characters.
What can I say? *shrug* I would promise you clarity as the stories progress, but that is impossible to do.
Not all stories are for everyone and this seems to be not your cup of tea. May I make a suggestion? I would heartily suggest that you simply skip the last segment and and the complete next two stories and save yourself some grief. I have a feeling you won't like them any more than this one and might not be worth your effort.
Gee, I can tell this is a serious post. Only one emoticon!
Your personal sarcasm detracts from your honest critique of the story. Don't shadow your credibility with it.
I was simply offering a simple solution to what I thought was your dilemma. That if you didn't like it, why suffer reading it. Seemed simple enough to me. Still does. *shrug*
And please don't patronize me. You don't have to defend your work or give me the oust because I'm the only naysayer on this thread. Writers don't need to, and I understand that. But implying that it all might be my perception of your work that's influencing my opinion is a little high-handed of you, forum moderator or not.
Whoa, there! I didn't patronize you at all. I didn't/don't feel the need to defend my work, nor do I feel there is any reason to 'oust' you. I simply answered in what I thought was a clear and concise manner. And, as I reread my answer to you, I fail to see anything that would suggest that your perception was/is skewed. My sincere apologies if it was taken as anything other than its intent. And at the risk of sounding even more repetitious, if you don't like it, don't read it.
You may not like my opinion, but that's no reason to talk down to me. (And having the forummaster crawl out of the woodwork to lick your boot adds insult to injury, whether you put him up to it or not.)
I wasn't talking down to you. But I would like to interject something very, very important here.
You are more than welcome to comment on my work -- be it good, bad, or indifferent, or anyone else's here. But keep your comments confined to the fanfic 'literary' offerings. Personal innuendo and insults will NOT be tolerated on this fanfic board. This is not FWP where at times it seemed 'open season' on the distasteful 'flavor of the week'. You should remember that, having been on the sharp end of that stick with your own parodies. If you have a personal problem with someone or something, I suggest that you direct your comments utilizing the pm facility. This is NOT the forum for open personal attacks. There will be no 'open season' here.
Maybe I'll say differently after the last few sections get posted and I can see the work as a whole. Or maybe I'll say the same. (That is, if I don't get banz0red for posting this.) All I ask is that you reread both pieces and continue to revise and edit them as you see fit, and not just remain satisfied with the "OMG MORE PLZ!!11" spotlight.
We're all great believers in the right to express opinions here. We just ask that it be done in a tactful and considerate way and omit the personal commentary that could be construed as an slur or personal affront to either the writers or those posting comments. As I said before, if you have a personal problem with me, send me a pm.
And, in case you didn't notice, this is the end of the story MIND GAMES. The next in the series will begin in the near future.
