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[Tempest]

I don't think Moira's ever been a party member in any BG tales before, either. The chapter didn't go remotely like I had intended, but the flow of conversation between Alexandria and Moira went a different route, and I followed.

[Tempest]

My apologies for missing a week, but you can blame another writing project of mine, currently classified, that's off to an excellent start. Chapter 13 should hopefully get done this weekend.

[Tempest]

If anyone sees my muse, I want its hide nailed on my wall. Written four different chapters, doing four very different things, and haven't regarded any of them as good enough to post (though they did serve to develop a phobia for Alexandria with much potential for getting the entire party laughing at her...). Maybe I should just cut to the chase and start with the Keep. >_>

Fair warnings as well: certain third-string villains from canon are due to display intelligence scores above the single digits in this story. I do rather hate being cruel to my characters, but examining how things will go when the bad guys behave intelligently and cannily does have its interest...

[Dark-Mage]

Sorry it's been a while since my last comment. At University, and I couldn't remember myt password for the forums *blush*, but I have been following Malleus Animorum intently. Liking the way your story is shaping up as well and can't wait to see what you do with the keep.

[Tempest]

Progress is still stalled, unfortunately-exams seem to exact a hefty price on my writing muse, and I've been preoccupied by another fanfic project. Hopefully, the end of exams will get the creative juices flowing again. At present, one of the main issues is deciding whether to get in another peaceful chapter, or cut to the chase and open up with the assault on the keep.

[Shadowhawke]

Hey Tempest! Great to hear this is still coming along. Good luck for your exams, and when you do get back to writing, whatever you decide I'm sure will be best.

[Kellen]

But either way...

*Cue Ominous Music*

[Tempest]

Oh, believe me-I haven't abandoned this at all. I've actually written up what promise to be the cores of a couple of chapters, but this immediate chapter is giving me fits. Character development, or cut to the action? Focus on Nalia, Yoshimo, Jaheira, or some combination thereof? Humorous or serious? Interpersonal or big picture?

Does not help that Nalia kills me to write. With her original reason for being in the plot tossed out the window, I'm less inclined to take liberties with her personality, and I can't seem to get a handle on the way she thinks, acts, and speaks. I don't want to push her off to the sidelines, but quite honestly, I hate being challenged as a writer.

And re: Dark Mage, I do have plans for the keep, oh yes indeed. I just hope my creations will forgive me for what I have in mind.

[Jazhara7]

Interpersonal or big picture?

Interpersonal! Interpersonal!

(Still hoping for Ajantis... He seems to get the bad hands these days, having lost two relationships in two different stories at least already. Poor sod. )


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[Tempest]

If it'll salve your curiosity...

Spoiler

he's dead. Ajantis was never intended to survive this story, and was never destined to have a happily ever after with Alexandria.

[Jazhara7]

If it'll salve your curiosity...

Spoiler

he's dead. Ajantis was never intended to survive this story, and was never destined to have a happily ever after with Alexandria.

Awww. But it's alright, I am faithful you know what's best for your story. Poor Ajantis, though.

Still, the "Interpersonal! Interpersonal" shout still stands. Even if it doesn't involve one Ajantis.


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[Dark-Mage]

If it'll salve your curiosity...

Spoiler

he's dead. Ajantis was never intended to survive this story, and was never destined to have a happily ever after with Alexandria.

Am I right in thinking this is not common knowledge to the party yet? Do not think I have seen it discussed, however, there is every chance I simply missed it somehow

[Tempest]

Shoo! *Heads back to drawing board/MS Word...*

[Choo Choo]

Nice to see another chapter, Tempest. Enjoyable read, as always.

[Tempest]

Peanut gallery said interpersonal, so I ran with it. Originally intended the whole thing to be just between Alexandria and Yoshimo, but I felt it was a good time to establish some of the interpersonal dynamics that don't involve Alexandria as well.

[Jazhara7]

Peanut Gallery? 



Do you mean me?



Because my seat is worth its weight in silver, at least. Like totally.



If anything this is the Pistachio Gallery. They're much better than Peanuts anyway (unless the Peanuts have Wasabi. ).



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[Tempest]

*Shrug* It worked.

[Jazhara7]

*Shrug* It worked.

Want a Wasabi Peanut? Or do you prefer Pistachio too?

I also have some Wasabi and Mayonaise Cheetos lying around, though I'm careful with those, as it's not sure when or if I'll be able to get more.


(I'll be quiet now... )


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[Shadowhawke]

Hey Tempest! Very good work with the interpersonal there - I liked the way you've extended Yoshimo (although a note - despite Western perceptions, Japanese 'geishas' are actually highly trained artisans, not courtesans) and the banter between the three of them was quite fun. I also liked the hint that you'll be expanding the Keep, which I can't wait to see. And I think the only thing I have to offer in terms of constructive criticism was that I felt this chapter was a little dialogue-heavy, but overall it definitely achieved its interpersonal aim.

So yes. Basically, a good job once again, and I can't wait to read more!

[Tempest]

Well, if you're lucky, Chapter 54: The Anvil's Kiss, may be done in time for a Christmas special. Once again, things are going a fairly non-canonical route with the aid of a few low-level DnD spells not present in the game.

Expect things to slow down for a while once the Keep is retaken, though, in terms of overall pacing-I have some definite plans for more character development afterwards, and the Keep itself will go a non-canonical route, too, mainly due to upgrading the intelligence of certain characters.

Edited by Tempest, 21 December 2008 - 05:38 AM.