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[Solar's Harper]

Aneele and the Hunger playing cards?

That can't be a good sign, not that the Hunger makes it chirpy or anything.

Ahem, anyways, interesting cliffhanger you've written there Orthodoxia, makes me curious to see how well she'll restrain the urge to go wild like the previous time she was around Mulsantir - but knowing her, as long as no one steals her stuff there's a slim chance. Very slim.

Ok now I've run out of things to say, great chapter Orthodoxia! Look foward to seeing what else you'll put poor Aneele through... Hm, that wasn't a voucher for evil now was it?

[Orthodoxia]

I think that everyone in the story underestimate her control over the hunger. She's more like a golem now and doesn't respond emotionally as she is too focused on keeping the Hunger inside and under lock. Others are so overprotective and she can't for the life of her understand why.

Anyway, next few chapters will have to wait until I get them back from my editor.

[Solar's Harper]

Now I know what they mean by "glaring is more impacting than the floor".

Pretty nifty chapter, Orthodoxia. It showed each character's view on things rather well, although why Ele-- err, I mean, Aneele, keeps wanting to pet the resident Bear God is really perplexing. She must have some kind of obsession or something, to love fur that much.

And despite the truth of the situation with Gann's provocation earned glare, it kind of reminded me again of that little incident involving Neeshka's tail and Khelgar's... err, nuff said. Bascially memories which we all have you to thank for.

Look foward to seeing how "Mr Dream-wanderer" handles that domestic dispute.

[Abigail]

I've read it all, even though I hadn't played NWN2, so I don't know much about its plot. Your drawings of Aneele made me want to know what happened to her. She strikes me as a very deep character so I'm waiting for more and hope you'll finish it

[Orthodoxia]

Solar - "Mr Dream-wanderer" wouldn't know how to handle a domestic dispute with a guidebook in his hand.

Yes, Neeshka's tail getting squashed by Khelgar was one of happier moments. Not many like that these days.

As for Okku cuddling, as a warlock Ele'ena's biggest regret was that she couldn't have a familiar. Not to mention that after Daeghun's cold shoulder for years Okku's fatherly protectiveness is refreshing and appealing.

Abigail - I draw better than I write unfortunately. Still I hope you'll enjoy the story.

[Shadowhawke]

Nonsense, Orthodoxia... your drawings are beautiful, but your writing and the stories you tell are captivating too. And I just wanted to pop in and say how much I really enjoyed the last chapter! Aneele's reaction to Gann was very nicely done, but I especially liked the look we got into Aneele's head in this chapter... she's so involving and deep that it's easy to get lost in the story. So there.

[SaintZenn]

Just finished reading. I love it. I was hoping that it was finished on the other site, but at least I got a preview of what's to come. I can't wait to read more.

[Orthodoxia]

Shadowhawke - Thank you. I try to make Aneele as random as possible but she still reacts violently to certain things, she doesn't like being called brat.

SaintZenn - Slowly we'll get to that end. I can't promise it to be happy though

[Jazhara7]

I can't promise it to be happy though

How about Bittersweet?


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[Orthodoxia]

I can promise it'll be downright sad and disappointing

[SaintZenn]

Happy endings are over rated. Your writing is wonderful, I can't wait for more.

[Orthodoxia]

I will certainly do my best. Now I must go and replay the whole Sunken City if I want to write anything worthwhile

[Solar's Harper]

Yup, the theory is confirmed: Aneele hates being told what to do.

Ok, yes I am slow not to have figured that out already, so sorry Orthodoxia.

Ahem, anywho, now that I'm done filling space: Love this new chapter even more than the previous ones surprisingly. The Hunger almost going loose, the scene between Sheva and Aneele, and even Gann's somewhat undeserved scrutiny. Genius.

[Orthodoxia]

Yes, Aneele hates being told what to do. Except now she can eat your soul to make the point instead of just sneaking away. She hates being called brat too, so don't call her that. And that should have been obvious from the first chapter of "Silver Shards", no cookie for you

I wish I could have written this chapter with more suspense but I'm no horror writer, so meh. Now we shall continue driving the poor girl further into madness

[Jazhara7]

Ah, now I remember why I like Aneele so much. Because she likes Squid, just as I do.



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[Orthodoxia]

Unfortunately, I don't know how it tastes like

[Jazhara7]

Unfortunately, I don't know how it tastes like

Oh, it tastes great. We have a greek deli in our supermarket, and he has the most awesome Squid in oil with some herbs. Mmmmh...I'll have to get some of that again once we go shopping.

Maybe look around and see if you've got some kind of greek deli in your area too? Sometimes they let you try something you've never eaten before, so you might not even have to buy anything just to try it.


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[Shadowhawke]

Hey Orthodoxia! GREAT to see you back with a new chapter. And even though you said that you don't do sentimental, I thought Gann's scene was very, very nicely done. I also liked the way Aneele reacted, and the details of all the other characters woven in with the Hag's song. Awesome read, and I can't wait to see more.

[Orthodoxia]

Thanks It was a good part of the game to play but not a good one to try and turn into a story, for me anyway. I hope to be able to finish the whole story soon.

[Shadowhawke]

Wow. Dark and awesome, and very powerful. I love how you drew the dreams all together and gave us a flash back to how Ele'ena became as she did. Even for someone who hasn't played NWNII, I really got the sense of your character imprinting her story deeply into the game, and it was very touching. And on an ending like *that*... wow. I really can't wait for your nex one.