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[Shadowhawke]

Wow! That was a great start, Celticrose! I must admit that I'm not familiar with the Icewind Dale Games even though I do have them. But your story really brought it all to life. The only bit of constructive criticism I can probably offer is that there were a few grammatical mistakes, buut things like that are easily fixed . The characters were very nicely drawn and what you've written so far has been very compelling. I especially like Anariel and Rizdaer's interaction... they really play off each other well.

Looking forwards to more! You've actually got me contemplating actually playing the games now .

[celticrose]

Wow! That was a great start, Celticrose! I must admit that I'm not familiar with the Icewind Dale Games even though I do have them. But your story really brought it all to life. The only bit of constructive criticism I can probably offer is that there were a few grammatical mistakes, buut things like that are easily fixed . The characters were very nicely drawn and what you've written so far has been very compelling. I especially like Anariel and Rizdaer's interaction... they really play off each other well.

Looking forwards to more! You've actually got me contemplating actually playing the games now .

Thank-you so much for your review. This is my first fanfic and I can admit to being a bit nervous. As to the grammatical errors . . . well, english was not my strong suit in school, (history was).

I am so glad that the characters have come across and I must say that Anariel and Rizdaer are my favorites so far. I hope I am able to continue to keep you wanting more

Thanks again for reading,

CelticRose

[Shadowhawke]

Thank-you so much for your review. This is my first fanfic and I can admit to being a bit nervous. As to the grammatical errors . . . well, english was not my strong suit in school, (history was).

I am so glad that the characters have come across and I must say that Anariel and Rizdaer are my favorites so far. I hope I am able to continue to keep you wanting more

Thanks again for reading,

CelticRose

No problem! And welcome to Scribbles! . It's good to have you on board, and your characters definitely came across very enjoyably. I can see why Anariel and Rizdaer are your favourites... they're definitely mine too. As for the grammatical mistakes, they're surprisingly easy to make for everyone, so don't be too worried about them. They're nothing that a good grammar check in Microsoft Word can't fix.

Still can't wait for your next chapter.

[celticrose]

I hope to have another chapter at the ready in about 1 to 2 weeks, my job keeps insisting on getting in the way. Ah well, a girl has got to eat

Till then I ask your patience and indulgence,

CR

[Solar's Harper]

Fie on me for not reviewing this excellent work sooner!

I really like the way you've set the story out CelticRose, and the immersive tension of scenes such as the goodbye between Anariel and her father, or the various scenes involving Rizdaer's knack for attracting trouble simply for being what he is, 'tis really beautiful story telling.

Very interested in seeing where you plan on proceeding next when time allows.

Again for such great work.

[celticrose]

Fie on me for not reviewing this excellent work sooner!

I really like the way you've set the story out CelticRose, and the immersive tension of scenes such as the goodbye between Anariel and her father, or the various scenes involving Rizdaer's knack for attracting trouble simply for being what he is, 'tis really beautiful story telling.

Very interested in seeing where you plan on proceeding next when time allows.

Again for such great work.

Thank-you so much for such kind words!!!!!
I never knew how much a review could mean to a writer (albeit fledgling one, scribbler more like).
I can honestly say I understand now. It truly gives one encouragement and incentive to do well. And I, like you, am curious as to where the story will take me. I am not too sure who is driving it yet. I do know that Anariel is at times as confused as I am. She has a lot of "baggage" from her brother's death and the relationship with her father, it will be interesting to see just how it manifests itself. As to the others, well . . . only time will tell!

Thanks for reading!

CelticRose

[Shadowhawke]

Fantastic new chapter, Celticrose! As involving as the last few, with the cast of characters engaging and the battle scenes well done. Anariel's skill with lockpicks was interesting as well... I wonder if there will be some background to that later? Anyway, on the whole an excellent job, and I really can't wait to see more.

[celticrose]

Fantastic new chapter, Celticrose! As involving as the last few, with the cast of characters engaging and the battle scenes well done. Anariel's skill with lockpicks was interesting as well... I wonder if there will be some background to that later? Anyway, on the whole an excellent job, and I really can't wait to see more.

Thank you for reviewing . . . it helps!
As to lock-picks . . . I may just have to have someone ask her. Being able to pick locks would be a handy skill if one were to find themselves locked in their room often by their strict father

We shall see . . .
I hope to have the next chapter up by the beginning of next week,
Thanks for staying tuned!

C.R.

[Solar's Harper]

Always found the intro for Targos to be one of the most challenging points to describe, but you've pulled it off spectacularly Celticrose.

The personalities of each member of the company seem to be well enriched, and well in line with what was shown by Domi's NPC Project. Anariel is particularly interesting, given how as soon as one facet of her personality seems to be 100% known, another pops up and shatters that reader's delusion.

What makes me curious though is if they managed to find the teleporting Brimstone scroll while fighting those goblins.

Either way, loved the new chapter, and the one before it which again I am liable for not reviewing sooner. (and personally, I thought Ulbrec was shorter than Nord )

[celticrose]

Always found the intro for Targos to be one of the most challenging points to describe, but you've pulled it off spectacularly Celticrose.

The personalities of each member of the company seem to be well enriched, and well in line with what was shown by Domi's NPC Project. Anariel is particularly interesting, given how as soon as one facet of her personality seems to be 100% known, another pops up and shatters that reader's delusion.

What makes me curious though is if they managed to find the teleporting Brimstone scroll while fighting those goblins.

Either way, loved the new chapter, and the one before it which again I am liable for not reviewing sooner. (and personally, I thought Ulbrec was shorter than Nord )

Thank-you for your kind words

I try really hard to stay within character of each party member. As for Anariel, well, she has a mind of her own. I seem to discover things about her as I write. It makes it interesting, if not a bit surprising

Teleporting Brimstone Scroll???? Uh-oh I didn't even know it existed !?

So glad you have enjoyed the story! Thanks for reading!

C.R.

[Shadowhawke]

Hi again Celticrose! Sorry for taking so long to review. Just wanted to drop in and say that I really liked your new chapter... you know, at this rate, you're going to drive me to actually play Icewind Dale! Just a little note; I noticed a few tiny grammatical errors like 'breath' instead of 'breathe'... nothing that a proofread couldn't fix up. But aside from that, I really do love the way you're painting the characters... Rizdaer's moment of introspection was wonderfully done, and you really had the suspense going in that final scene! I can't wait to see the consequences and the fallout.

[celticrose]

Thank you Shadowhawke Reviews really help me to keep on track and they do wonders for incentive!
I find that the more I write, the more attached to the characters I become. In some ways, it makes it easier to write.

So glad that you are enjoying the story, and thanks for the tips.
I have been playing the game on off days while writing to help fill in gaps, plus, it is rather fun.

I am afraid I am running behind on this next chapter, a touch of intestinal-flu has had me down. I have to limit my time on the computer, as it still causes a bit of a headache and nausea. But I shall prevail, even if it means pen and paper for now!


Thank-you again for continuing to read along!

C.R.

[Shadowhawke]

Wow, awesome new chapter, celticrose! It was fascinating (and saddening) to see Rizdaer's past, but it was beautifully and compassionately done. I also love the scene between the three of them - the character interaction was fairly sizzling off the page there, and it was great to see! Can't wait to see what else crosses their way now that Rizdaer is firmly a part of their group.

[celticrose]

Wow, awesome new chapter, celticrose! It was fascinating (and saddening) to see Rizdaer's past, but it was beautifully and compassionately done. I also love the scene between the three of them - the character interaction was fairly sizzling off the page there, and it was great to see! Can't wait to see what else crosses their way now that Rizdaer is firmly a part of their group.

Thanks . . .


C.R.

[Shadowhawke]

Great to see you back and writing again, celticrose . Some lovely little bits in this new chapter - I loved how Rizdaer saved Peony, and Anariel's confrontation was awesome. I also loved how creepy you made her fight with Ricarver, even though it was so short. And again, the interaction between Anariel and Rizdaer was beautifully pulled off. Honestly, you draw me into your story with each new chapter, and even though it's been so long I was as riveted as I was when I started. So yes, I'm really looking forwards to more! Thanks again for such an enjoyable read.

[celticrose]

Hello Shadowhawke,

Thank-you for your kind words!!! My apologies for the delay between chapters. My RL work has been
rather demanding of late, but I shall endeavor to make time for the story. I so enjoy seeing how the story unfolds, and I love even more that others are enjoying it as well.

I loved how Rizdaer saved Peony, and Anariel's confrontation was awesome.

He couldn't help himself. I doubt he would admit it, but I think even Rizdaer is charmed by Peony, lol.

I also loved how creepy you made her fight with Ricarver, even though it was so short.

Ricarver just came came out creepy . . . as to the shortness of the fight, well, blame that on Rizdaer. Had he the time, I think he would have enjoyed taking his time, but in this case, Riz's goal was to eliminate the threat. For some reason the drow did not like the creepy rogue of the Iron Collar.

And again, the interaction between Anariel and Rizdaer was beautifully pulled off. Honestly, you draw me into your story with each new chapter, and even though it's been so long I was as riveted as I was when I started. So yes, I'm really looking forwards to more! Thanks again for such an enjoyable read.

Your praise goes a long way in spurring me forward, thank-you so much!

CelticRose

[Orthodoxia]

I've been toying with the idea of writing an IWD2 story but simply couldn't pull it off so it's a great pleasure to see someone do it so masterfully. I really enjoyed how you've selected characters and presented them telling just enough to keep me reading and enjoy the story. And the fights are written really well too without going into too much detail (and every fight described is great for me since I don't know how to write action )

And since I came in with the last chapter I'll just say: Rizdaer pocketed what?! Should I worry about Anariel now or be delighted that he's plotting something?

Excellent work so far

[celticrose]

Hello Orthodoxia,

I've been toying with the idea of writing an IWD2 story but simply couldn't pull it off so it's a great pleasure to see someone do it so masterfully. I really enjoyed how you've selected characters and presented them telling just enough to keep me reading and enjoy the story. And the fights are written really well too without going into too much detail (and every fight described is great for me since I don't know how to write action )

And since I came in with the last chapter I'll just say: Rizdaer pocketed what?! Should I worry about Anariel now or be delighted that he's plotting something?

Excellent work so far

Well we will see just how far I can get . . . you see, I haven't played thru the whole game yet
I am still stuck in- er, I mean playing thru chapter 5.

As for the fight scenes, lol. I really enjoy them. I like coming up with believable (anyone seen spell check?) possibilities with a bit of magic and common sense thrown in, like, "What would I do in this situation??" (run and hide!).
I have been writing a historical romance set in the scottish highlands for over a year now, and have had a blast with fighting scenes.
Anyhow . . .

Oh, and don't worry, Rizdaer is always a step ahead, lol.
The powder will make a reappearance sooner or later, for good or ill,
it has yet to be whispered in my ear.

My thanks for your kind review and input, I never realized before how much encouragement
you can derive from these comments, I hope they keep coming!!!

Thanks for reading

C.R.

P.S. The next chapter should be up before next Tuesday (fingers crossed )

[Shadowhawke]

It is seriously my lucky day/week, to have so many of my favourite fanfictions update . You made my day when I swooped in here and saw you'd updated, CelticRose. I must say, although I'm not quite sure how the new chapter fit in the timeline from the last chapter (nor the ramifications of Anariel under the effects of that magic dust..?) I loved your new work. Again, you have Rizdaer and Anariel down wonderfully, and I couldn't help but laugh at that little aside you added with Peony. Thanks again for a great read, and needles to say, I'm eagerly awaiting more .

[celticrose]

It is seriously my lucky day/week, to have so many of my favourite fanfictions update . You made my day when I swooped in here and saw you'd updated, CelticRose. I must say, although I'm not quite sure how the new chapter fit in the timeline from the last chapter (nor the ramifications of Anariel under the effects of that magic dust..?) I loved your new work. Again, you have Rizdaer and Anariel down wonderfully, and I couldn't help but laugh at that little aside you added with Peony. Thanks again for a great read, and needles to say, I'm eagerly awaiting more .

Greetings Shadowhawke,

So glad I added to your windfall of good reads
This chapter was suppose to fall the day after the tavern brawl & magic dust,
(Don't fret, the dust will make a reappearance at a later date . . . )

I figured that our friends would have given themselves the night to recuperate, and then reported to
Shawford the next morning. This chapter is the aftermath of the attack on Targos from the north/outside
the walls, (the end of the prologue).
I can honestly say, I didn't have it in me to write the main battle, so,
I kinda skirted it, and picked it up near the end, after the last explosion is fired and the final shaman, slain.

Was it too confusing? Suggestions? Perhaps I should have had a small chapter in between?

And, yeah, I am partial to Rizdaer and Anariel . . . can't help myself

I am hoping to start writing the next chapter tomorrow,
but with RL work hovering on the horizon, I haven't much hope of finishing or posting until,
well, m-a-y-b-e next week.



Thanks for reading,

CelticRose