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[flysoup]

I just can't stop pop the Chibi's...

The chaotic Chibi duo of Montaron and Xzar:

[Lurker of the north]

I just can't stop pop the Chibi's...

The chaotic Chibi duo of Montaron and Xzar:

Not that much difference (chibi-non chibi) at all when it comes to Xzar, is it?

[flysoup]

I just can't stop pop the Chibi's...

The chaotic Chibi duo of Montaron and Xzar:

Not that much difference (chibi-non chibi) at all when it comes to Xzar, is it?

Ehehehe!, You couldn't be more correct sir

Here is another sample from the current visual edit process:



Another sample of the current visual edit process. Changed the baby to a human, brought from the slave servants of the Drow. Also edited Viconias eyes to red glowing infra view. Her eyes will change after a while when living on the surface. Also closed some open inking lines on Viconias hand in panel 2.

[flysoup]

The sibling of the protagonist that constantly delivers a giggle after her annoying rambling and babbling. She is a nice girl but with a habit of getting on ones nerves.

[Miloch]

Very nice. Have to say I'm not a huge fan of this chibi style though. I don't mean your work in particular, but the style itself looks... odd . Guess I'm more a fan of realistic cartoons...

Which brings us to the Viconia panel. Very good use of detail and realism there. Not sure why you changed the baby from drow to human, but I'm sure it's part of the story I haven't gotten to yet. Also, as a drow Viconia's eyes should be red naturally, not just from infravision. I think I got her colours pretty close in this portrait according to "canon" stuff (5th one down or so on the right) so you're not too far off from that.

And yeah, a print version of this would be great. Not sure what kind of licences you'd have to obtain for it, but you should be fine putting out a free PDF or something like that anyway.

Edited by Miloch, 07 August 2009 - 11:03 PM.

[flysoup]

Very nice. Have to say I'm not a huge fan of this chibi style though. I don't mean your work in particular, but the style itself looks... odd . Guess I'm more a fan of realistic cartoons...

Which brings us to the Viconia panel. Very good use of detail and realism there. Not sure why you changed the baby from drow to human, but I'm sure it's part of the story I haven't gotten to yet. Also, as a drow Viconia's eyes should be red naturally, not just from infravision. I think I got her colours pretty close in this portrait according to "canon" stuff (5th one down or so on the right) so you're not too far off from that.

And yeah, a print version of this would be great. Not sure what kind of licences you'd have to obtain for it, but you should be fine putting out a free PDF or something like that anyway.

Yea you are right about the Drow eyes being red naturally, my error. As you say a free PDF shouldn't be a problem since it is a fan comic and that I wouldn't gain any profit for it. I will have that in my mind when the crafting of the BG Comic webpage will get into business. About the chibi's, I wasn't so in to it either but just recently have discovered that there is much to learn from that style as well when it comes to expressions and such. But still I am more rooted in the European style.

Back into the dark pits of the Underdark as the fate of Viconia continues... I want to share an example on how much the comic improves by prune1 from Spellhold Studios with his text edits. In panel one I first wrote: "Vicona now wandered the Underdark as a lonely fugitive?" but prune1 massively improved the feeling and the drama with his suggestion: "Exiled, and marked for death, Viconia wandered the Underdark. A fugitive amongst her own kind." So give him some cheering and applauds because with his aid the storyline really improves and also cleans it from my 'Swenglish'. My visual edits and his text edits on page 1-52 will be uploaded on a upcoming webpage for the comic. I also want to thank everyone that has given me constructive criticism on both visuals and story content. I have learned much from that and also adapted many changes based on that. Good speed to you all!

[prune1]

I'm personally just enjoying the fact I get a quick sneak peak before others at your new pages these days! Glad to be helpful.

I have to say I never envisaged you taking on the help so willingly when I first went through those 48 or so initial pages. Since then, as you say, I've made a few wholesale changes to sentences and I'm very happy that you're so easy to work with.

What i mean to say is that the latest 6 or so pages upon which we have corresponded individually have been through a better editing process.

In that initial document I posted here I left out minor things such as, for example, not changing 'Evereska the Elven stronghold' to what it should really be: 'Evereska, the Elven stronghold', and other such smaller things.

Have you already been through and made all the changes I suggested initially? If not, i'd like to go through these pages again and really bring them up to scratch, as it were.

Let me know if you would mind; I now know that you like these changes and the only reason I didn't do such small things from the start was that I thought you may think I was simply being petty and infringing for no reason.

Thanks and regards.

Edited by prune1, 08 August 2009 - 06:30 AM.

[flysoup]

I'm personally just enjoying the fact I get a quick sneak peak before others at your new pages these days! Glad to be helpful.

I have to say I never envisaged you taking on the help so willingly when I first went through those 48 or so initial pages. Since then, as you say, I've made a few wholesale changes to sentences and I'm very happy that you're so easy to work with.

What i mean to say is that the latest 6 or so pages upon which we have corresponded individually have been through a better editing process.

In that initial document I posted here I left out minor things such as, for example, not changing 'Evereska the Elven stronghold' to what it should really be: 'Evereska, the Elven stronghold', and other such smaller things.

Have you already been through and made all the changes I suggested initially? If not, i'd like to go through these pages again and really bring them up to scratch, as it were.

Let me know if you would mind; I now know that you like these changes and the only reason I didn't do such small things from the start was that I thought you may think I was simply being petty and infringing for no reason.

Thanks and regards.

I would be amazingly happy if you would go over them and make those edits! I am overjoyed to have such a good aid since I am really lacking when it comes to the writings. I have many ideas when I make the script but I am often limited to get them out on paper. You take the comic to the high level it should be on when it comes to the writings

Best regards/
Michael

[flysoup]

-Edwin do this, EDWIN DO THAT... somebody get this jerk a banana.

[prune1]

Good to see the chibis coming along well.

However, now to more serious and not so cute matters!

Here is a comprehensive list of changes for your comic up to and including page 54. Everything should now be in order. Lots of commas and other punctuation has been added (I did/do have a problem with comma splices (using commas where not needed/in the wrong place), but I was fairly careful to use them only when necessary so it should all be fine. I've taken more freedom this time through and many sentences have been changed. I know you don't mind, and once again I appreicate that very much. Here's hoping I don't cause you too much trouble in redoing these!

.rtf file as with the last time I did such a large scale change: http://www.2shared.c...ectionsrtf.html

Please note a few things:

1) All these changes are in reference to your original pages, i.e. nothing requires you to look at the previous edits (which I know you've done some, if not all...which further makes me feel bad that I didn't do all this in the first place and avoid causing you hassle) and in fact I would suggest looking at the original pages so everything is proper and in context and you can see where to make the necessary changes easily and correctly.

2) I know i've been putting stuff in bold, but now the changes are usually more than simple spelling corrections, so it doesn't always work. I have however taken care to try and put in a (much) larger font and in bold the punctuation marks.
But, that is not to say I didn't miss any...there could be a small comma somewhere in the normal size font that may be missed. So, my advice is to select the whole text and enlarge it to a huge font size, and be careful as you go through the changes to get the sentence exactly as written. You missed one or two things last time, so in some ways this second edit would have been needed anyways.

3) Er, i just felt there should be a point 3, even though I can't think of one right now...a list with 2 items would hardly be worth the trouble writing '1)...2)' for...so this point 3) is to not make me look idiotic (though I think I have now managed that absolutely...)

Keep those comic pages coming, it should be easier after this fairly epic re-editing for us (and especially you!) to change the following pages one by one as they come.

Thanks, regards, and all the rest of it!

Edited by prune1, 08 August 2009 - 02:34 PM.

[flysoup]

Good to see the chibis coming along well.

However, now to more serious and not so cute matters!

Here is a comprehensive list of changes for your comic up to and including page 54. Everything should now be in order. Lots of commas and other punctuation has been added (I did/do have a problem with comma splices (using commas where not needed/in the wrong place), but I was fairly careful to use them only when necessary so it should all be fine. I've taken more freedom this time through and many sentences have been changed. I know you don't mind, and once again I appreicate that very much. Here's hoping I don't cause you too much trouble in redoing these!

.rtf file as with the last time I did such a large scale change: http://www.2shared.c...ectionsrtf.html

Please note a few things:

1) All these changes are in reference to your original pages, i.e. nothing requires you to look at the previous edits (which I know you've done some, if not all...which further makes me feel bad that I didn't do all this in the first place and avoid causing you hassle) and in fact I would suggest looking at the original pages so everything is proper and in context and you can see where to make the necessary changes easily and correctly.

2) I know i've been putting stuff in bold, but now the changes are usually more than simple spelling corrections, so it doesn't always work. I have however taken care to try and put in a (much) larger font and in bold the punctuation marks.
But, that is not to say I didn't miss any...there could be a small comma somewhere in the normal size font that may be missed. So, my advice is to select the whole text and enlarge it to a huge font size, and be careful as you go through the changes to get the sentence exactly as written. You missed one or two things last time, so in some ways this second edit would have been needed anyways.

3) Er, i just felt there should be a point 3, even though I can't think of one right now...a list with 2 items would hardly be worth the trouble writing '1)...2)' for...so this point 3) is to not make me look idiotic (though I think I have now managed that absolutely...)

Keep those comic pages coming, it should be easier after this fairly epic re-editing for us (and especially you!) to change the following pages one by one as they come.

Thanks, regards, and all the rest of it!

Glorious deeds!

I am overjoyed after reading through the edits that will bring the comic to a higher level! Not only grammatical corrections but also changes of whole sentences and suggestions about other content like the speaking of a dwarf and speech bubbles for example and more as well. Thanks for giving it the time and doing research like in the Evereska issue. I am looking forward to implement the changes. I will follow your suggestion about being careful so I don't miss out on any edit like I did before. This is GREAT! I bow for your aid in the making of this comic!

(Hopefully the Chibi's wont distract the process of the comic too much...)

Best regards/
Michael

Edited by flysoup, 09 August 2009 - 12:30 AM.

[flysoup]

-I could dance on the head of a pin, as well.

[prune1]

I can see the gleam in his traitorous eyes from here...

I mean, er, how cute.

[darlarosa]

SO *twitch* adorable, I wants to hugs every chibi o_o

[flysoup]

I can see the gleam in his traitorous eyes from here...

I mean, er, how cute.

Ehehehe! You sure can see through his cute mask.

[flysoup]

SO *twitch* adorable, I wants to hugs every chibi o_o

They all hug back!, hmmm maybe not all. I suspect that Edwin, even in his chibi form ain't the hugging type

[flysoup]

My scanner cable joined the fallen today... So there probably wont be any artwork updates until the payceck from the everyday slavery work arrives. Not that I am that quick in updates anyway, so you wont probably notice any difference

Anyway here is the last artwork I managed to scan before the factory collapsed. This piece has nothing to do with the Baldur's Gate saga but I am sure that Mr Logan would have been a kickass npc to have in your party

[flysoup]

My dear mother borrowed me some coins so I could buy a new scanner yesterday. So I am back in business, able to share my updates with you all. To celebrate that; here is Jan Jansen and his beloved and legendary turnips. The great idea with the chibi turnips was given to me by Valedhelven at Deviantart.

[darlarosa]

Delicious yet disturbing lol

[flysoup]

Delicious yet disturbing lol

I can actually agree to the disturbing part