186 replies to this topic

[Aliya]

The dagger, oh, the dagger! Great!

[Orthodoxia]

I'm Baaaack!!

You know what the funny thing is? She has wings and yet there's no trace of them in the comic. I'll chalk it up to magical disguise.

EDIT: For your viewing pleasure the page has been redone. Tell me if it works and if you can see all of it. Especially you WeeR. I'm relying on your eagle eye for spotting mistakes

Also, cookie for anyone who can guess from which comic did I rip off the last panel.

EDIT #2: Shuffled the dialogue a bit.

Edited by Orthodoxia, 27 December 2008 - 02:59 PM.

[Aliya]

Well, FINALLY!

Awesome, poses, Dox! And the Sla... I mean... 'Killer'!

[WeeRLegion]

Neatos. Good atmospherics. :]


Think you could have strengthened the linework a bit in the second to last panel, and added a few faint highlights to the last, it took a bit of looking to figure out what was going on there.

[Orthodoxia]

Perhaps you're right but by the time I got there my idea shifted to background being more important. Besides, the "action sequence", if I dare call it so, is so crappy it's better off being imagined instead of seen

[WeeRLegion]

"RARR! SMELL MY ARMPIT OF RAZORBLADES +4!"

"NAY! YOU SMELL MY SOCKS!"

.p

[Orthodoxia]

Excellent imagination

[Orthodoxia]

Re-done page 5 re-posted Now, that took a whole lot of coffee.

[WeeRLegion]

Mmm, afraid I can't get a second first impression, but I do think it's clearer now. ^^


Hehheh, having hair about the same color as the face maybe isn't from a practical point of view the best of ideas, but heehee.

[Epantiras]

"RARR! SMELL MY ARMPIT OF RAZORBLADES +4!"

"NAY! YOU SMELL MY SOCKS!"

You're going to kill me someday!! rotfl

The page looks better after the edit, however I'd suggest you to add the, uhm how's it called in English? Wake?

Attached Images

• 

Edited by Epantiras, 09 December 2008 - 10:14 AM.

[Aliya]

Superb! I like that Sla... Killer!

[Orthodoxia]

What is this? A new page? Can it be possible? And the next one is on the way as well? Something good must have happened. ... Well, no, not really.

I shall warn you that there is a significant lack of quality in this picture. You can just tell that I'm getting sick of doing it.

Edited by Orthodoxia, 27 December 2008 - 09:11 AM.

[Aliya]

GO NARRA!

Kick its butt! Hey, Doz, I don't like that devilish grin in the last panel. And Xan looks a bit worried for Narra, of terrified, at lest...

I love it! But I don't get it...

[Orthodoxia]

Doz How many times have you renamed me now

*nod nod* Terrified is a good word.

[Orthodoxia]

Page 7.

[Aliya]

You're quick as hell, Doz. And I like it!

I have a guess, Dox. May I?

I think that Killer, has devoured Narra, or maybe the opposite. But I think, that Narra and the killer are the ONE!

Edited by Aliya, 27 December 2008 - 09:19 AM.

[Orthodoxia]

Which killer would you be talking about here? They're both Bhaalspawns if that's what you mean.

[Aliya]

The red icky thingy this a sheepish grin. No offense.

Anyways...

Run, Xan! RUN!

[Orthodoxia]

There is no icky red monster thingy Ali, otherwise everyone would have been running back in page 3. I did not manage to convey it well but only Narra saw it as that. He's a regular street thug. A wee bit insane driven but still a human. There's only one Slayer in the comic.

[WeeRLegion]

There is no icky red monster thingy Ali, otherwise everyone would have been running back in page 3. I did not manage to convey it well but only Narra saw it as that. He's a regular street thug. A wee bit insane driven but still a human. There's only one Slayer in the comic.

OMG! Major fail at that goal! Xan goes all 'WHAT'S THAT CREATURE?!', can't help but deduce he's looking at something other than a thug... o-o
Of course I wouldn't have even thought of such had you not mentioned it, really, it makes more sense without that comment. .p



Otherwise, looking stylish as usual. :]
Will be interesting to see what comes of it later. @_@