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[Userunfriendly]

So you guys like?

[Shed]

I really like the first part . Haven't had time to read the others, however. I will do soon!

[Shadowhawke]

Loved it on Epic, still love it here.

[Userunfriendly]

new chapter is up...come on guys, some more comments...i know people are reading it, 135 views...

[Shadowhawke]

Sorry! I've been away on camp... love the new chappie, UUF! You were evil leaving us on a cliffhanger last time... but another one now...

You're still evil, UUF. But I do love your writing.

[Userunfriendly]

Sorry! I've been away on camp... love the new chappie, UUF! You were evil leaving us on a cliffhanger last time... but another one now... 

You're still evil, UUF. But I do love your writing.   

sorry...but i am evil, and i had already written 8 pages worth...i try to keep each chapter between 5-8 pages, and it was just getting too long...

[Shadowhawke]

Heh, love the new chapter, UUF. I love the way your mind works and you can explain all of the technology... it's amazing, and for someone who usually finds that kind of thing kind of boring, for me to be actually interested is nothing short of a miracle. Thumbs up for this new chappie!

(And not to spoil anything... but the image of a satanically grinning Jan Jansen for the reasons given was absolutely and utterly hilarious. A stroke of genius, my friend )

[Userunfriendly]

Heh, love the new chapter, UUF. I love the way your mind works and you can explain all of the technology... it's amazing, and for someone who usually finds that kind of thing kind of boring, for me to be actually interested is nothing short of a miracle. Thumbs up for this new chappie! 

(And not to spoil anything... but the image of a satanically grinning Jan Jansen for the reasons given was absolutely and utterly hilarious. A stroke of genius, my friend    )

Thank you!!!

<-Jan...

time to get started on the expose chapter...sigh...

[discharger12]

Wow, User. You sure can write alot! And your imagination reaches far past anything I can even comprehend! I'm slowly trudging along because there is just so much information to take in.

It's really good, though. I'll try to keep up with what you write.

Edited by discharger12, 31 August 2005 - 01:33 PM.

[Userunfriendly]

Wow, User.  You sure can write alot! And your imagination reaches far past anything I can even comprehend! I'm slowly trudging along because there is just so much information to take in.

It's really good, though.  I'll try to keep up with what you write.

*i'm blushing!*

[Userunfriendly]

quick bump, so people have a place to comment...

[Madbringer]

I think the best way to say what i feel about your writing is saying that nothing short of Jordan's "Wheel of Time" made me stare in motionless hypnosis at the computer screen for two hours straight. Maybe i'm exaggerating here a little, but i really like your writing, great job. And yes, you're paying for my glasses, i think i'm going blind from all the white

Edited by Madbringer, 22 May 2006 - 05:02 PM.

[Userunfriendly]

I think the best way to say what i feel about your writing is saying that nothing short of Jordan's "Wheel of Time" made me stare in motionless hypnosis at the computer screen for two hours straight. Maybe i'm exaggerating here a little, but i really like your writing, great job. And yes, you're paying for my glasses, i think i'm going blind from all the white

EEEEEEEPPPPPP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

oh dear...wow...that really means i have to maintain quality on all subsequent chapters...pressure...

oh yeah, thank you so very much for that complement! yep, I too remember the facination i had with the wheel of time series...

urm...i don't know how to change the forum skins, you might want to pm a moderator about it...but i think the new forum allows you to change the color scheme to something easier on the eyes...

[DalreïDal]

Hey! This story's resurrected!!!

What you've made it is very original, and very interesting. You go just enough into detail to give some credibility to your world without drowning us into useless details.

Your characters are nicely adapted too, I think.

So I just hope that you won't forget this for months again *threatens*

[Shadowhawke]

Damn, UUF, you never fail to amaze me. MON has gotten me ever since you posted the first chapter. I'm so glad you *finally* (Hint hint, nudge nudge, glare ) decided to resurrect it with such an awesome new addition! It was evil of you to leave us with a cliffhanger like that, though. Although I'd be surprised if you left us with anything else. . Good work, and thanks so much for keeping my eyes glued to the screen for so long... again . Please pay for my glasses as well.

[WeeRLegion]

Hehheh.
I recall reading a little bit of the first chapter once upon a time in a galaxy far far away, then staring at the screen with an "WTF?" look on my face, and pressing the back button.
But now, i almost regret that, but since there are good sides to reading a longer story in a go instead of longing for shorter pieces to come, i won't regret it.
*Snort*


Well written, i certainly couldn't do better, though it in a way inspires me to try...

...

Aliens, ancient conspiracies, fancy tools, flashy fighting... what more could a demi-omnivorous reader like me hope for?

YES! Battlemechs!
But those wouldn't seem to fit in with the cyborgy ladscape you've painted, so i'll let it slide.

[Userunfriendly]

Hey! This story's resurrected!!!

What you've made it is very original, and very interesting. You go just enough into detail to give some credibility to your world without drowning us into useless details.

Your characters are nicely adapted too, I think.

So I just hope that you won't forget this for months again *threatens*

yeah...that is my biggest problem when writing cyberpunk...i read a LOT of hard science fiction, and the temptation to go into the technology of room temperature superconductors, the mechanics of gravity drive propulsion at the drop of a hat is overwhelming at times...

but luckily the characters i've created are interesting and compelling enough for me to be into writing about them...

Damn, UUF, you never fail to amaze me. MON has gotten me ever since you posted the first chapter. I'm so glad you *finally* (Hint hint, nudge nudge, glare ) decided to resurrect it with such an awesome new addition! It was evil of you to leave us with a cliffhanger like that, though. Although I'd be surprised if you left us with anything else. . Good work, and thanks so much for keeping my eyes glued to the screen for so long... again . Please pay for my glasses as well.

Waaa...I'm paying for everyone's glasses!!!

well, the next chapter will be a continuation of imoen's lecture...i've got to go a bit further into paladins, druids (why cyborgs are called druids? believe me, they do make sense...) deathstalkers, and deathbringers (cheesy names, but Canon...) and jessie's and imoen's early history...

gonna start the next chapter today, infact..i got some ideas.. B)

Hehheh.
I recall reading a little bit of the first chapter once upon a time in a galaxy far far away, then staring at the screen with an "WTF?" look on my face, and pressing the back button.
But now, i almost regret that, but since there are good sides to reading a longer story in a go instead of longing for shorter pieces to come, i won't regret it.
*Snort*


Well written, i certainly couldn't do better, though it in a way inspires me to try...

...

Aliens, ancient conspiracies, fancy tools, flashy fighting... what more could a demi-omnivorous reader like me hope for?

YES! Battlemechs!
But those wouldn't seem to fit in with the cyborgy ladscape you've painted, so i'll let it slide.

urm...lilacor is a battle mech...

lilacor is the artificial intelligence personality implanted into a HK-407 series landmate (powered battle armor) in the episode following the next one...yes, he is a lilacor/hk 47 hybrid...

and he sounds just like you'd expect him to...

[Madbringer]

(powered battle armor)

OMG, a possible Fallout reference. /faints

[WeeRLegion]

Haw! That'll do just fine...
So how about the Carsomyr? 100 tons of sweet armoured destruction, eh? eh? eh?

Well, maybe not.
Maybe?



Hehheh, well, keep it up, i'm looking forward to the next instalment.

[Userunfriendly]

(powered battle armor)

OMG, a possible Fallout reference. /faints

sorry, never had a chance to play fallout...

but just think of every evil psycho computer/robot reference on film and you can guess what lilacor sounds like...

"I'll be back."

"I'm afraid I can't let you do that, Dave."

"EXTERMINATE! EXTERMINATE!"

Haw! That'll do just fine...
So how about the Carsomyr? 100 tons of sweet armoured destruction, eh? eh? eh?

Well, maybe not.
Maybe?



Hehheh, well, keep it up, i'm looking forward to the next instalment.

that is a thought. maybe a hovertank with a plasma thrower main gun?