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[Snowking]

Here is one PC and one Mazzy initiated flirt. I will probably add another of each later if I feel like I'm in a sharing mood. Thanks for voting.

6. Grab her behind.

6a: (She bats your hand away instinctively and upon seeing you you
     blushes furiously.) I'm sorry <CHARNAME>, you just suprised me
     thats all.
6b: (She bats your hand away playfully.) Nice try <CHARNAME>, but
     it wasn't quite good enough to get me.
6c: <CHARNAME>...I don't know what to say. (She turns red and
     turns quickly away to avoid your gaze.)
6d: (She places her arm around your waist with a smile.) I'm glad
     somebody is in a good mood today.

And here's the Mazzy initiated one.

(Mazzy aproaches you her water flask in her hand. She holds it out for you an you take a small swig from it. To your surprise it doesn't contain water but pale wine.)

"I was saving it for a special time alone but it doesn't matter so long as I have it with you my love. " (She smiles to herself as she replaces the flask into her pack already planning on when to next use it.)

Stay tuned for more previews in the near future!

Edited by Snowking, 30 May 2005 - 01:54 AM.

[Jenova]

(Mazzy aproaches you her water flask in her hand. She hold it out for you an you take a small swig from it. To your surprise it doesn't contain water but a pale wine.)

"I was saving it for a special time alone but it doesn't matter so long as I have it with you my love. " (She smiles to herself as she replaces the flask into her pack already planning on when to next use it.)

That's sooo sweet :^^:
I really like those two flirts, hope to see more :thumb:

[Snowking]

I'm glad you like them. It's comments like these that make it worthwhile and want to display more of my work. Thanks for the support and keep an eye out for more previews soon.

SK

[Archmage Silver]

(Mazzy aproaches you her water flask in her hand. She hold it out for you an you take a small swig from it. To your surprise it doesn't contain water but a pale wine.)

"I was saving it for a special time alone but it doesn't matter so long as I have it with you my love. " (She smiles to herself as she replaces the flask into her pack already planning on when to next use it.)

Few minor corrections, if I may. I've bolded the parts. She holds it would be correct. but a pale wine Would sound better without the a before pale.

[Snowking]

Typos and not thinking about the grammar properly. Thanks Archmage Silver, I'll fix that.

SK

[Togashi Renshi]

(Mazzy aproaches you her water flask in her hand. She hold it out for you an you take a small swig from it. To your surprise it doesn't contain water but a pale wine.)

"I was saving it for a special time alone but it doesn't matter so long as I have it with you my love. " (She smiles to herself as she replaces the flask into her pack already planning on when to next use it.)

Few minor corrections, if I may. I've bolded the parts. She holds it would be correct. but a pale wine Would sound better without the a before pale.

yeah, that and you also might want to consider adding a comma after water. Then again, I just like commas, so I may be wrong.

[Snowking]

yeah, that and you also might want to consider adding a comma after water. Then again, I just like commas, so I may be wrong.

I'll consider it after water or maybe even but. And if you like commas then this mod is for you, there aree commas everywhere!

SK

[Togashi Renshi]

And if you like commas then this mod is for you, there aree commas everywhere!

I have but one thing to say to that. Score. Freakin' score.

[Snowking]

Because I'm nice and in such a good mood I have decided to share another flirt with all you lovely supporters.

12. "I have to fight all of my instincts not to kiss you."

12a: You know you really shouldn't stress yourself too much. (She leans
    forwards and kisses you before giving you a small smile.)
12b: (She giggles and flashes you a pure white smile before returning her
    attention to checking her gear.)
12c: <CHARNAME>, I'd hate for you to exert yourself. If your urges are that
    bad then I say follow your instincts.

And of course, where would we be without another Mazzy initiated one.

(Your lover and close friend Mazzy approaches you. She grins as she pulls forth a small mint and she places it in your mouth. You smile at the taste and once you have finished it you move closer to Mazzy and wrap your arms around her waist and stare into her eyes. She leans forward eyes closed and you kiss passionately for a minute before breaking apart without a word.)

You know what they say, "No smint, no kiss."

SK

[Jenova]

Because I'm nice and in such a good mood I have decided to share another flirt with all you lovely supporters.

12. "I have to fight all of my instincts not to kiss you."

12a: You know you really shouldn't stress yourself too much. (She leans
     forwards and kisses you before giving you a small smile.)
12b: (She giggles and flashes you a pure white smile before returning her
     attention to checking her gear.)
12c: <CHARNAME>, I'd hate for you to exert yourself. If your urges are that
     bad then I say follow your instincts.

So...when do you plan to finish? Those are another nice samples.
I would really want to see that in-game! Keep up the good work! :thumb:

[Snowking]

No time frame and no release date or I'll never release it. I still have a bit of coding to do before I release a beta (or create an alpha) however my skills are improving and when I start LT coding I actually have to do a couple , can't stop myself. Once I've coded the LoveTalks and Flirts I may get some help tidting it up and creating an Alpa for testing. If that checks out fine then I can add the quests in and test that and then she'll be ready for release.
Thanks for your support, glad you like those samples.

SK

[Snowking]

I'll keep that in mind although I'll probably change it around so Mazzy kisses you, she does initiate the flirts. I will keep in mind options for some (does any other mod do this?).

SK

[jastey]

Hi Snowking,
sorry my last post was a bit short (I was at work, ahem.)

What I personaly (and this might be only my taste and not second by everyone) would prefer is if the flirt would go something like this:

~(Your lover and close friend Mazzy approaches you. She grins as she pulls forth a small mint and she places it in your mouth.)~
++ ~(You smile at the taste and once you have finished it you move closer to Mazzy and wrap your arms around her waist and stare into her eyes.) + kiss
++ ~...

IF ~~ THEN kiss
SAY ~(Mazzy leans forward eyes closed and you kiss passionately for a minute before breaking apart without a word.)~

The flirt could go differently now, if my PC wouldn't be in the mood for example , so you'd have to think about different possibilities, but it would make it better IMO.

As I said, it's only my taste, but for me a very important criteria for the quality of a mod (I don't like being told what my PC does or feels). I would be happy if my comments are useful to you.

Anyway, don't let your enthusiasm be spoiled! :thumb:

[Snowking]

I will definetly take this into consideration, options are good. Does anyone else agree with jastey or have any certain requests that I can consider. Your opinions matter to me (no really, they do!).

SK

[Sir Kalthorine]

12b: (She giggles and flashes you a pure white smile before returning her
     attention to checking her gear.)

Just a personal impression, but Mazzy has never struck me as the "giggling" type, even if she were in love and comfortable in <CHARNAME>'s presence. Perhaps more in character might be:

12b:(She flashes you a pure, dazzling white smile before returning her attention to checking her gear.)

[Snowking]

Thats true. I was revising some of them and I think I have something more suited for that one. Thanks for bringing it up.

SK

[Archmage Silver]

Hi Snowking,
sorry my last post was a bit short (I was at work, ahem.)

What I personaly (and this might be only my taste and not second by everyone) would prefer is if the flirt would go something like this:

~(Your lover and close friend Mazzy approaches you. She grins as she pulls forth a small mint and she places it in your mouth.)~
++ ~(You smile at the taste and once you have finished it you move closer to Mazzy and wrap your arms around her waist and stare into her eyes.) + kiss
++ ~...

IF ~~ THEN kiss
SAY ~(Mazzy leans forward eyes closed and you kiss passionately for a minute before breaking apart without a word.)~

The flirt could go differently now, if my PC wouldn't be in the mood for example , so you'd have to think about different possibilities, but it would make it better IMO.

As I said, it's only my taste, but for me a very important criteria for the quality of a mod (I don't like being told what my PC does or feels). I would be happy if my comments are useful to you.

Anyway, don't let your enthusiasm be spoiled! :thumb:

Yes, I think that the mod looks much more bigger when you can have many options for every LT. Big mods are good.

[Loké]

12b: (She giggles and flashes you a pure white smile before returning her
    attention to checking her gear.)

Just a personal impression, but Mazzy has never struck me as the "giggling" type, even if she were in love and comfortable in <CHARNAME>'s presence. Perhaps more in character might be:

12b:(She flashes you a pure, dazzling white smile before returning her attention to checking her gear.)

Perhaps more (Blushing faintly, she flashes you a dazzling smile before returning her attention to checking her gear.)

Also, I don't think

12a: You know you really shouldn't stress yourself too much. (She leans forwards and kisses you before giving you a small smile.)

I don't think 'you shouldn't stress yourself too much' is something Mazzy would say. How about 'you shouldn't worry yourself so much'?

[Deathmage]

Hey, not bad.