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[Lord Ernie]

Hmmm... not bad, not bad... Perhaps Korgan kind of overuses 'me axe'. I mean, he says it a lot, but IIRC not in every possible sentence. Still, it's quite good (I like "more o'yer blasted *feelings*, very 'Korganish').

[Sir Kalthorine]

Hmmm... not bad, not bad... Perhaps Korgan kind of overuses 'me axe'. I mean, he says it a lot, but IIRC not in every possible sentence. Still, it's quite good (I like "more o'yer blasted *feelings*, very 'Korganish').

 

Thanks for the useful feedback Lord E (as ever!), I'm glad you liked it. Looking back at the banter I think you may be right about the prevalence of Korgan's axe, so thanks for the pointers!

[Sir Kalthorine]

And by way of catching up on lost time (Korgan's banter was for August, and it is virtually September and time to provide another!), it is Imoen's turn to share some of her interaction with Chrysta. The following sample banter will probably occur after a night's rest in the tavern, shortly after returning to Athkatla for the first time after escaping the Underdark, but before Imoen gets her soul back.

[Kulyok]

Just passing by and thought I'd say some unpleasant things.

First, I've noticed two typos: its instead of it's in the third line, and full stop missing at the end of the first line.

Also, there are somewhat too many emphasises, "*" - I think one per dialogue is more than enough. It's just me, of course, but I think that Bioware did not overindulge it, either.

And finally, the length of the dialogue. I think it is too long compared to the original Bioware dialogues, and thus, stands out, screaming to me, as a player: "it is a mod!" Also, it may invoke a 'trapped' feeling in the player - he's got to press "continue" a good dozen times.

Other than that, a very interesting concept!

[Lord Ernie]

Actually, I don't mind the lengthier banters, nor the fact that this points out that you're playing a mod. I think it's more important to capture the style of the characters themselves than the original writing style. Modded banters tend to be longer than the regular ones, anyway. Besides, the original also had some very length banters (the Jan banters specifically are famous for this, check out the Jan-Imoen banter in ToB).

Though, now you mention it, there's perhaps a bit too many *'s in there, especially the Korgan banter.

[Aion]

For some reason, they remind me of good friends or sisters...

[Seifer]

Longer banters should be avoided as a manner of good form. I've worked on mods that have been over verbose so its not that major as the precedent has been set.

[Deathsangel]

indeed a bit too many *'s here and there.

As a funny sidenote (it has been awhile since I've been here). The PC appears to be named Kalthorine (duh ) in the Korgan - Chrysta banter. Won't he look up weird in Watcher's Keep

[Sir Kalthorine]

As a funny sidenote (it has been awhile since I've been here). The PC appears to be named Kalthorine (duh ) in the Korgan - Chrysta banter. Won't he look up weird in Watcher's Keep

Oy! I left the bleedin' note there in the first place... I'm just going back there to pick it up!

 

Um... er... that was me by the way.

[Sir Kalthorine]

I have to admit I'm very impressed with the characterisation and wit of this snapshot.

Thank you, kind stranger!

[Minarvia]

These are GREAT, Sir K! I especially love the banters with Minsc and Edwin. Well done! I'm glad so much progress has been made. I know she'll definately be worth the wait.
BTW, I must be a dummy as well because unless she was a bard I don't know where she would get her lore from, either.

[Sir Kalthorine]

These are GREAT, Sir K! I especially love the banters with Minsc and Edwin. Well done! I'm glad so much progress has been made. I know she'll definately be worth the wait.

I promise to do my best not to let you down then... there is nothing like high ecpectations to keep the (positive) pressure on!

BTW, I must be a dummy as well because unless she was a bard I don't know where she would get her lore from, either.

And neither should you... but rest assured that all will become clear when you play the mod. I am not (nor ever have been) a fan of the "Deus ex Machina" unexplained goodie/power/plot device. Everything will have a rationale that can be discovered and explained logically and consistently within the game, but be warned that you may have to play things exactly right to get all of the answers first time around!

[Sir Kalthorine]

Well, it has been a while since any definite evidence of progress has been posted, so berelinde suggested it might be time for another non-too-spoilery teaser banter. Sounds like a good idea to me

So here is an early-game exchange between Aerie and Chrysta:



P.S. Sorry about the automatic resizing thingy - can't find a way to turn it off!

[Solar's Harper]

Looks great Sir K, just a bit out of character for an 'early Aerie' in my opinion, perhaps too confident to speak her mind, and maybe a little too hostile towards Chrysta during the opening. Regardless this project shows promise, can't wait for that final release date.
Good work!

[Deathsangel]

Okay, don't get angry... but euh... aren't they a bit ... like too long? ... Pls, don't kill me

[Sir Kalthorine]

Okay, don't get angry... but euh... aren't they a bit ... like too long? ... Pls, don't kill me

Not angry at all, I don't do angry

And yes, they are rather long when compared with standard Bioware banters - but that is one of the things people will be warned about with respect to Chrysta. She will be much more "front-and-centre" than many NPCs so far released... not because I think it is needed, or that previously released NPCs are somehow "deficient" in that regard (I do not think that at all, in fact far from it - the 'best' NPCs are those that integrate themselves seamlessly in as Bioware-NPC a way as possible). I just intend making Chrysta a different kind of NPC experience, with numerous sidequests, new (or old ) areas, longer banters than normal, etc. So she won't be a regular Bioware-style NPC, as much as I am a personal fan of those - after all this time, I want to give people a new kind of NPC experience (complete with warnings as to what is different about her). This is also part of the reason why she is taking so long.